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Dan ([personal profile] muchtooarrogant) wrote in [personal profile] halfshellvenus 2019-05-04 09:56 pm (UTC)

"Her Mama looks half-broken, but I know that'll
be Jenny someday if we don’t get away from this place and what it does to you."

Excellent! As others have already said, you capture the depression era tone perfectly.

Now see, since you did this well under a time crunch, it sorta makes you wonder if you should write under that kind of pressure ALL the time? *teasing*

Best of luck!

Dan

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