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rayaso ([personal profile] rayaso) wrote in [personal profile] halfshellvenus 2019-05-04 05:38 pm (UTC)

What a great entry to write in such a short time! You handle the dialogue (and dialect) so well, to create a detailed sense of time and place, and handle the complex relationships. Out of such a dreary, depressing setting, you create hope at the end. One of your strengths as a writer is the variety of entries. They are never the same, especially the last four. I never know what you're going to come up with. You're drawing from a very deep well. You are also excellent at creating an intimate, vignette-style feel, while telling a more expansive story. Great work!

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